Second Draft - ROADS

After re-shooting the bedroom scene and credits, we showed the second edit of our film opening to our teacher and class once again. We then received feedback once again, yet this time solely from the teacher.

Improvements given after feedback from a larger group of teachers were:

The voiceover at the started needs to be re-recorded as it sounds very tinny and as if it was done on a phone, creating atmosphere for a horror film opening.
More narrative is needed as bedroom does not tell story.
Credits; Writing on the pill bottle looks messy, need to be printed.
              Cigarette packet looks too fake.
              Order of credits was wrong, BFI order needs to be checked.
Needs more comical aspects; A toilet scene - someone sitting on the toilet.
                                                Things going wrong.
                                                Underwear falling out of bag in public.
All cuts are in time with the music and fit well.